there's a period at the end of the url you posted - http://www.liscreensavers.com
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very nice layout and color - doesn't display well in NN4.75 though - a couple of suggested copyedits: "To unsubscribe please send a blank e-mail to the following address" - on Contact, "Webmaster If you have any questions or comments about our homepage" - "Feedback If you have any comments on one of our screensavers - I think you can close up the extra lines in Advertising Information and Webmaster by deleting the space in front of the closing paragraph tags - on FAQ, "Do your screensavers work on Voodoo cards?" - you might want to change the lnk at the top from "Support" to "FAQ" - on Links, "This site is under construction" - there a few lines where you say, "If....please..." - you might want to separate those clauses with a comma - again, a very attractive site!!
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one more - this sentence "Is there a screensaver you always have been looking for?" may be correct in that you're not splitting the verb, but it reads a little awkward, I'd say - I'd just go with "you've always been looking for" - also, you might want to say, "and maybe you will be able to download it soon" - you might want to give all your pages a title
I love the site. Everything is great. I seriously can't think of anything you can change. The colors, logo and everything about it is just great!
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mmi posted this at 22:23 — 7th March 2001.
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there's a period at the end of the url you posted - http://www.liscreensavers.com
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very nice layout and color - doesn't display well in NN4.75 though - a couple of suggested copyedits: "To unsubscribe please send a blank e-mail to the following address" - on Contact, "Webmaster If you have any questions or comments about our homepage" - "Feedback If you have any comments on one of our screensavers - I think you can close up the extra lines in Advertising Information and Webmaster by deleting the space in front of the closing paragraph tags - on FAQ, "Do your screensavers work on Voodoo cards?" - you might want to change the lnk at the top from "Support" to "FAQ" - on Links, "This site is under construction" - there a few lines where you say, "If....please..." - you might want to separate those clauses with a comma - again, a very attractive site!!
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one more - this sentence "Is there a screensaver you always have been looking for?" may be correct in that you're not splitting the verb, but it reads a little awkward, I'd say - I'd just go with "you've always been looking for" - also, you might want to say, "and maybe you will be able to download it soon" - you might want to give all your pages a title
[Edited by mmi on Mar. 07, 2001 at 05:53 PM]
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Denmark 3 posted this at 01:20 — 9th March 2001.
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I love the site. Everything is great. I seriously can't think of anything you can change. The colors, logo and everything about it is just great!
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