Testing new first page. Please review!

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Please compare and let me know what you think.

new
http://www.tasfoundation.org/test/index_c.html

and

old
http://www.tasfoundation.org/

What do you think?

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Tor-Andre Skogland
founder of TAS Foundation
http://www.tasfoundation.org

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At first I didn't like it but after studing it a little I think that is isn't bad. Wasn't sure exactly what the information, pictures, amputation, cancer are. Will these be linked? or are they just like keywords to tell what the site is about? they are a bit hard to read being cursive. the enter and kom inn kind of over power the other text but that may be your intentions. The picture of you looks a little odd because it is squared on the bottom right and the rest of it is blended. Not sure what to advise here. I like the pic but I think you should do something different, effect wise, with it.

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I like the look of the new one, but think you need to take advantage of the space you have, spread it out a little. a few ideas:
the words, "information, pictures, etc" could be more stagged, "cancer" being above the knee on the picture while "information" starts before or just after the circle sections of the TAS section.
swap the flag and enter around (flags first) and use a smaller text for the enter.
That photos not really the best picture as its lit from the wrong side and the main focus point is your good knee/leg, you could use your graphics program to select the dark patchs and lighten them bringing up a clear picture of your tan, also as Disaster-master has mentioned the bottom corner and section need blending could improve it a lot.

keep up the good work, its looking good

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I'm new at this part of webmastering. So I'll try to improve it with your advices.

The four words was meant to be keywords for what to expect in our site. Not sure if I found the right font though. I'll rearrange the flags and enter and kom inn. I also see that the picture could be somewhat different. The problem is that the picture ends at the bottom under my foot. But I'll try to blend it a bit more. I also tried to add another picture as a background but it was too much.

Sorry that I can't figure out the word "stagged". Does it mean rearrange the four keywords?

Should I use the text on my old pages insted of the keywords?

I think the half moons that have been "cut off" is representative for amputation. I'm satisfied with the toåp of what I've made but not finished with the work at the bottom.

I'll rearrange and do some more work and let this page stand and make a new one so we can compare the progress. Thanks for giving me advise. I appreciate it very much.

Weekend greetings from Norway!!

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Tor-Andre Skogland
founder of TAS Foundation
http://www.tasfoundation.org

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I believe that when busy said "stagged" he meant "staggered". Probably not so close together.

Am I beginning to understand your slang busy? Laughing out loud

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I have not seen the 1st page it takes 30 seconds to load at 56 k. The main is nicly done.

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Quote: Am I beginning to understand your slang busy? Laughing out loud

and to think I dont even have an accent, you all do Laughing out loud my spelling seems to be getting worse these days Sad Think I need to learn to spell proper Smiling

I think I meant staggered lol, Thanks Disaster-master Smiling

one here
            one here
                        one here
                                    one here

kinda thing

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Busy, Just in case your eyes are bad there is a little button that you can punch before you submit the post. It is called SPELL CHECK. hehehehahahahohoho This might be just the ticket for you. OR just don't worry about it and let everyone learn to laugh at your cute mistakes like I do.Wink

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I just looked and none of the images are coming up! I'll try again later. I see you are back to peach.

Trouble with spell checkers is that you need to get close to being right for it to know what you are wanting! My husband is terrible at spelling and calls me to try to decipher his emails, etc!!

Julia - if life was meant to be easy Michael Angelo would have painted the floor....

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The background has not been changed yet. Still trying out different styles and css. Have not yet decided what to go for.

The pictures should now show. The mistake in html code is now corrected. I've sliced the picture into smaller pictures. Have not yet done anything to correct the things you have pointed out for me to make it a better first page. I also see that when I redused the quality to 60% the background on the picture and the background doesn't match. There is a sligt variance.

br
Tor-Andre Skogland
founder of TAS Foundation
http://www.tasfoundation.org

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The load time is much, much better for this one. You said there was a varience in color for background of images but I don't see one. If there is, it is so slight that it isn't noticable.

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Ok, I love the way you have done most of it & I think that peach suits that page best.

Things I don't like are
- the picture - not the actual picture but the softness/mistiness I just don't think it fits in well.
- the [enter] & [kom inn] I think spoils the overall look. I think people would click the flags without being told to enter, you can put the alt tag as 'enter the english pages' & whatever the german is (can't remember from school Wink)
- the words I feel are in the wrong font, but also should be listed in a slightly different order so they slope better

information
amputation
pictures
cancer

Julia - if life was meant to be easy Michael Angelo would have painted the floor....

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See if this is better.

http://www.tasfoundation.org/test/index_c_ok.html

I have not sliced it up. It's 80 kb so it takes a little time to load. The two language buttons doesn't work yet.

Let me know what you think now. Is it better??

br
Tor-Andre Skogland
founder of TAS Foundation
http://www.tasfoundation.org

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That photo is a little too fuzzy around the edges there. Try to fix that up. Also shrink down your drop shadows - those are way too big (one of my pet peeves...) Otherwise it looks good.

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Looking better but (always a but with me - sorry)

Your layout now is more to the point and is doing what it should, which is great, but am now thinking the wording and picture maybe arent suited, The site to me has gone from a personal one to a professional one but has a lot of the personal left over (this is good, dont get me wrong - read on)
your text reads "Information and pictures of amputees living with a handicap" This should maybe be reworded as it kinda sounds like your parading these peoples pics, how about something along the lines of "Help and Information for amputees living with a handicap" but even then the word "handicap" isnt a nice word, doctors classed me as 5% disabled (i have a stuffed knee) but I dont see it as a handicap or disabilty, to me its an incovience, I realise its a whole different league but the general public see "handicaped" as a monster or something, my ex-girlfirend is in a wheelchair, even the chair to a lot of people means she is a less of a person, she isnt, shes the same as everyone else just has wheels instead of feet.

also the "we try to be an inspiration", the word "try" could maybe be swaped for something else, "we are .." "we aim to be ..." or even just "an inspiration to all"

I'm also thinking maybe your picture belongs on a different page, the your story page, or maybe add another persons picture so its not so "my homepage" looky

does "TAS" stand for anything? maybe put that under the TAS

sorry for rambling on, even ignoring the above its looking better, keep up the good work

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TAS is my initials. It's a foundation which I want to live long after I'm dead. By using my initials I make a difference and my spirit will live forever. A foundation should be a never diying thing.

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Tor-Andre Skogland
founder of TAS Foundation
http://www.tasfoundation.org

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